英语作文 cctv spring festival gala 怎么写啊，帮帮忙啊

这是我自己写的，改过一次，因为在准备托福所以字数会写多一些，就当参考吧~~
Spring Festival Gala on CCTV
Since the Spring Festival Gala on CCTV was established in the 1980s, it has been confirmed to be a huge success by attracting most audience in China. On the Eve of the Spring Festival, numerous Chinese will sit in front of the television screens looking forward to enjoy the annual celebration.
In modern China, watching the gala is still a traditional way to celebrate Chinese lunar New Year. However, the Gala seems to be suffering from declining rates of audience over the past few years. Actually, the Gala is never the only option any more when competing with several local televisions, which provide better possible choices. In addition, it is criticized that the traditional items of the Gala fail to appeal to people’s changing appetite, particularly the younger generation. Although the famous stars from Hong Kong and Taiwan are highly expected to add some freshness and modern elements to the performanc