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Most people like animals. Animals are our good friends.
When I was a child, I kept some beautiful gold fishes. I love them very much. So I was so sad when they are died. Now I don't have any animals, but I also love them.
Many people feed pets, such as dogs, cats, rabbits, and so on.They think animals are cute and friendly. But I have heard some people kill a lot of widelife animals to make money. I can't stand it! But I can't do anything for them, so when I grow up, I will join the WWF.
Now animals are fewer and fewer, so we all should protect them. If you try to love animals as more as possible, you will find that animals are love you too.
Let's protect animals together!
"So I was so sad when they are died. " are 去掉
文中重复使用but,可以用however代替。
"But I can't do anything for them, so when I grow up, I will join the WWF." but和so不能连用
"Now animals are fewer and fewer" 改成"Now the number of animals are becoming fewer and fewer"
"as more as possible" more改成much,as…as中间不能用比较级
“you will find that animals are love you too”are去掉
句中now重复太多，可以用at the moment,nowadays适当代替的
大致帮你改一下，如果要文章出彩，就多用点句型和丰富的词汇。
例如转折可以用however,承接句子可以用besides,in addition,what's more.
个人建议可以用personally speaking,in my opinion
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Most people like animals. Animals are our good friends.
When I was a child, I kept some beautiful gold fish. I loved them very much. So I was so sad when they died. Now I don't have any animals, but I still love them.
Many people feed pets, such as dogs, cats, rabbits, and so on.They think anima