英语高手进（帮我改篇作文）

来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/06/17 12:53:28
T-Mac is a talented player.During his peak,he was able to do anything he wanted to,so nobody could prevent his offence.Ever,his slam dunks suprised everyone,which made me like his playing style.But after he suffered from various injuries,he became weaker.His body didn't permit his doing pretty actions anymore.He had to absent most games.It's injuries that limit his ability.Nerver did he give in to destiny.But why is t-mac distructed by so many people? When tmac absents games,people call tmac "Cui Xi".When tmac gets low points and rockets loses games,media claims tmac is not worthy of his 20 million salary.I am very sad,because even fans who like tmac deeply ever,don't believe tmac either.If Tmac had kobe's luck,he would have four champions.If tmac were healthy now,he would have done what kobe had done.But tmac you don't feel sad,our true fans will stand for you forever
指出语法上的错误

第3句 he was able to do anything he wanted to (do).(beacuse)no body could prevent his offence.
His slam dunks surprised everyone,(it) made me (fall in love with) his playing style.
跳过一句 He became (more and more) weaker.

When T-MAC gets low pionts and (the) rockets lose games.

don't believe in T-MAC (anymore).

But T-MAC you don't (have to be) sad beacuse (your) true fans will stand (behind) you forever.
打括号的是改的地方.

麦迪是个天才运动员。在他的职业生涯的顶峰，他无所不能，只要是他想要做的，他都能做到，所以他目中无人。曾经，他的扣篮使我喜欢上他，也赢得了所有人的掌声。但是，在他身体遭受各种病痛折磨时，他的状态不如前了。他的身体状况再也不允许他卖命打球做漂亮动作了。他不得不缺席大部分的球赛。正是身体上的伤痛限制了他的能力。然而他从未向命运投降。但为什么麦迪被这么多人误解？当麦迪缺席球赛时，人们叫他“Tracy”（而不是T-Mac了）。当麦迪得低分而导致火箭队输球赛时，媒体吹嚣麦迪的表现不符他的两千万薪水。我很伤心，因为甚至连曾经很喜欢麦迪的球迷，都不再相信麦迪了。如果麦迪有科比的运气，他早就拿了四个冠军。如果麦迪现在身体无大碍的话，他该有高比的成就了。不过麦迪，你不要伤心，我们这些真心的球迷会永远支持你的！