请帮我批改一下英语口语作文指出一下本作文的语法和逻辑错误谁找的最多我给分

来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/06/16 09:03:09
TOPIC
what is your idea about internet addiction?
Do you think it's a social problem?
how can we cure it?
正文如下:
If someone take the drugs,painkillers,you will be in addicton,
so as to be unmanageable? It's really a serious problem in recently
years that children dosen't go to school and turn to the internet cafe.however,the government manages(能用什么别的词替代吗）strictly.internet still the biggest problem in my country.porngraphy,computer on-line games,qq chatting is poisoning(envenoming)our youngs.there are thousand of porn site,on-line games
site on internet can easily be found. when youngs use the internet
.So the solution is cutting into the time of surfing the internet
they need for some activities like football,basketball，running,swimming,these activities usually important(能用什么别的词替代吗）for everyone keep their metal and psychology health.Remember,
internet is only be your tool.

If someone take （takes） the drugs（此处泛指吸毒，the可以去掉）, painkillers, you 指代someone应该用he）will be in addicton,
so as to be unmanageable? 希望表述什么意思？是“以至于难以管理”还是“难道难以管理”呢？如果是前者要去掉问号，如果是后者则应该是：Is it unmanageable?
It's really a serious problem in recently years (recently是副词，不可用介词in，应改为 in recent years)
that children dosen't （children don't复数！）go to school and turn to the internet cafe.
（children don't go … and turn …, 既不go也不turn，所以后面应该改为and they like to turn…）
However, the government manages (has managed to keep teenagers away from sticking to the web-bar一直设法让青少年远离网吧。注意用完成时态！）strictly. Internet （缺谓语动词！加 is） still the biggest problem in my country（our country是通用的说法）. Pornography, computer on-line games, qq chatting is （三个主语并列应该是复数，所以要用are） poisoning (envenoming) our youngs（年轻人youth或the young）.
There are thousand (上千应讲thousands) of porn site (复数sites), (去掉逗号改为and) on-line games site (sites) on internet can easily be found, when youngs （the young） u