看看语法问题,make sense吗?

给你改一下， 你的句子有run on. 第二句没错误， 但是很瘪口。

Everything in the story is abnormal. The main conflict of the story is between patrick maloney who told everything to his wife one day after work and his wife who killed him afterwards.

英文中最好不要说tell everything what happened. 这样很重复， 你可以直接说tell everything, 或者tell what happened. 另外， conflict和irony是有区别的， 所以最好不要用or, 因为or表示解释。你可以去掉irony. 或者后面再加一句解释irony得

本人英文专业， 如果有不懂可以给我发信息。

Everything has occurred in the story is abnormal. The main conflict or irony of the story is that Patrick Maloney came back from work one day and then told to his wife about everything that happened but then his wife killed him after that.

Everything occurred in the story is abnormal. The main conflict or irony of the story is that Patrick Maloney came back from work one day and told everything happened to his wife. Then his wife killed him.

"The main conflict or irony of the story is " 后面加 that