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Happiness is considered very important in life. Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?
As we known, happiness is increasingly playing an essential role in such a competitive today. However it is really a hard assignment to give it a specific definition since happiness is certain feeling of abstraction which would bring individuals delight. This means the cause of family chores in daily life or even some ambiguous thinking. As far as I concerned, I tend to distinguish the reasons that raise happy feelings into two kinds, mental factors and physical factors.
We can find in certain circumstance that just a funny painting or a humorous movie can brighten your mood for a long time. At majority of time, it is no relevance about extravagant lifestyle, but only something about your inside stillness. Imaging your lovely girlfriend surprise you with the first cooking that have done by herself, there would be some beauty come across you
As we known, happiness is increasingly playing an essential role in such a competitive today. However it is really a hard assignment to give it a specific definition since happiness is certain feeling of abstraction which would bring individuals delight. This means the cause of family chores in daily life or even some ambiguous thinking. As far as I concerned, I tend to distinguish the reasons that raise happy feelings into two kinds, mental factors and physical factors.
We can find in certain circumstance that just a funny painting or a humorous movie can brighten your mood for a long time. At majority of time, it is no relevance about extravagant lifestyle, but only something about your inside stillness. Imaging your lovely girlfriend surprise you with the first cooking that have done by herself, there would be some beauty come across you
两个问题 Why is it difficult to define? What factors are important in achieving happiness?第一个问题，楼主回答了。但是第二个问题上，似乎有一点偏题I tend to distinguish the reasons that raise happy feelings into two kinds强调的是原因。
再者是行文不是很流畅。
开头的As we known, happiness is increasingly playing an essential role in such a competitive today. ，实在是大大的套话。
而且我有点好奇，楼主是不是考过六级，感觉文章的布局太...六级。
本人愚见^^
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第一期和 第二期 已经都批改完毕了
很多考鸭 都在里面发布 作文呢