请给看下我写的英语短文，挑错，30满分，能给几分？

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中文稿：我和你同岁，我想我会理解你的感受。你是否应当反思自己的某些做法？比如，是否对父母表示过你的关心？有没有对家中的一些重要事情发表自己的看法？如果你认为你应当被看作一个男人或女人，而不是一个孩子，那么就应该表现自己的能力，让别人知道你能照顾好自己。我们的母亲通常会给我们过多的关心，我们应当理解她们这样做是因为爱。我的英文：we are nearly of an age. i think i can understand you feelings. whether you should reflect on youself in something,for example,do you care about your parents in somways for you family matters. whether you think you should be look upon as man or woman ,but not be child,so you should show your abilities more and more to make others know that you can look after yourself.we mothers often lavish us with attention.we should understand they do it like this because love.我还希望哪位能抽空在qq上帮我学英语，858265996谢谢

you feelings改成your feelings whether you should reflect on youself in something改成Whether you can reconsider your certain make the law? be look upon as man or woman 改成 be seen as a man or woman but not be child 改成 but is not a child we mothers often lavish us with attention改成Our mother will usually give us excessively many cares we should understand they do it like this because love改成We must understand that they do this are because of the love in somways也错了，好象没这么搭词的吧 很难及格，你语法都不清楚 全是按字面翻译

中间几个“是否”我觉得不能翻译成WHETHER，那是字面意思，准确一点我觉得应该用 have not you ever

还有那个 如果你想要被看做是一个男人或者女人，没人这么说吧，直接 看做一个成人，if you want be an adult

look after 是照看小孩子，照顾自己take good care of

……等等，还有好多小错误，好好改改吧

如果这是高考作文，30分估计能得18-20分左右

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