感谢英语牛人帮我检查下面这段话的语法错误 高分

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Cameron (2001) claims that there are some benefits for young people to starting foreign language study in the primary school, for instance, it can improve their listening skills and cultivate the capabilities of pronunciation over a long period of time. Whereas, some problems are still cannot be ignored. In most cases, although they start earlier, younger children are slower than the older learner in grammar study. Cameron also mentions that “Learning second language through immersion differs from learning s foreign language as a subject lesson several times a week”. It is Apparent that “immersion” students who study other school subjects also in foreign language are more qualified than students who only attend regular foreign language lessons.

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Cameron (2001) claimed that there are some benefits for young people to start foreign language study in primary school.For instance, it can improve their listening skills and cultivate the capabilities of pronunciation over a long period of time. However, some problems still cannot be ignored. In most cases, although they start early, younger children are slower than the older learners in grammatic study. Cameron also mentioned that “Learning a second language through immersion differs from learning a foreign language as a subject lesson several times a week”. It is apparent that “immersion” students who study other school subjects also in foreign language are more qualified than students who attend regular foreign language lessons only.
译文：卡梅伦(2001)宣称：人在小学时开始学习外语是非常有益的。比如说：经过一定时期的过程，这可以提高他们的听力技能，培养发音的技能。然而，有些问题是不可以忽视的。很多情况下，年少孩子在语法学习方面，是跟不上大龄成年人地。卡梅伦也曾提起：通过本能的外语学习，不同于一周几次外语学科的学习。明显的是，用外语学习其他课程的学生，要优势于只在外语课上学习外语的学生。

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Cameron (2001) claim