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There recently has been an intense discussion about the cause of the high sales of consumer goods which is on sale. Some experts think it is just led by the power of advertising. By contrast, some researchers claim the popular goods represent the real societal preference. I am the believer of the former one.

As far as I am concerned, the advertisements play a crucial role in our decision about purchasing goods. It seems that advertising can make us less time-consuming and more economical. Without enough time to go shopping, people can also acquire the information of the new products through the media. Moreover, there exists an evident fact that more and more people just choose the goods in the advertisement as their favorite star represents the product and recommend it. Especially in young group, it is not uncommon. They always take no consideration on functions or the price, and just follow the fashionable trend. A recent study conducted by the Chinese Academy of Social Sci

(Recently there) has been an intense discussion about the cause of the high sales of consumer goods which (are) on sale. Some experts (reckon the main reason for high sales is) led by the power of advertising. (In) contrast, some researchers claim the popular goods represent the real societal preference. (However, I'm more in favor of the statement demonstrated by the experts.)

As far as I am concerned, the advertisements play a crucial role in our decision (makings when) purchasing goods. It seems that advertising can make us less time-consuming and more economical. Without enough time to go shopping, people （could easily) acquire the information of the new products through （varies types of） media. Moreover, (there is an factual evidence that we can not neglect, which is more and more people choose celebrity packaged products, this is more often seen) in young group. (The youth of today) always take consideration on (neither) functions (nor prices), (instead they bli