谁能帮我改下作文啊 按雅思评分标准打分 急急!!!!

来源:百度知道 编辑:UC知道 时间:2024/05/14 02:44:41
whether the vistors should obey local customs and behaviour is a controversial issue,people may need plenty of times to reach consensus.there are two main artuments often heard in contemporary society

some people tend to believe that visitors should follow the local customs and behaviour,as far as they are concerned,local sustoms is a vital culture,obviously,it represent the history of local area,they think,therefore,visitors should follow the local customs in case it occur some unhappiness and so forth

however,others,take a negative attitude,they believe that host country should welcome the other culture,the main reason for their view is that different culture may bring some new element and creat new life concept for local people,making the local people experience different culture

from the personal perspective,i strongly think both of them play significant role in local people ,to preserve the local culture can make the area more attrictive and char

楼上的都在说什么呀。。雅思写作是满分9分的阿。。俄。。

Lz的作文有点模板的味道。。

个人感觉6分。

开头whether the vistors should obey local customs and behaviour is a controversial issue,people may need plenty of times to reach consensus.楼主觉得这两句话重复不?太罗嗦了。

。。。。。差不多把 83

还可以 比较通顺 满分100的话.............就80分

如果满分一百那就是84了