UC知道帮我改改雅思作文呗，谢谢！
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各位老师同学帮我改改雅思作文呗，我总写不好，能大概给个分就更好不过了。谢谢！
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
Prevalence of video games has become a major concern among parents, teachers and researchers. According to a national survey conducted by the National Institute on Media and the Family(NIMF), 92% of children and adolescents aged 2-17 play video games. In order to prevent younger generation from the negative effects of computer games, some researchers claim that children should not be allowed to play PC games.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words
MY ANSWER:
More and more children play video games nowadays. Facing to the impact of computer games, people has different opinions. Somebody point out that adolesents are explosed to foul language, obscenities, and obs
You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.
Write about the following topic:
Prevalence of video games has become a major concern among parents, teachers and researchers. According to a national survey conducted by the National Institute on Media and the Family(NIMF), 92% of children and adolescents aged 2-17 play video games. In order to prevent younger generation from the negative effects of computer games, some researchers claim that children should not be allowed to play PC games.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words
MY ANSWER:
More and more children play video games nowadays. Facing to the impact of computer games, people has different opinions. Somebody point out that adolesents are explosed to foul language, obscenities, and obs
你第一句就糗了。nowaday太模糊，不好。more and more 也太简单了。
参考：With rapid innovations in electric technology for the last decade, an increasing number of children begin to choose video games as their prior entertainment at home.