英语的一分钟演讲,进来帮我改改吧!急

来源:百度知道 编辑:UC知道 时间:2024/06/16 03:44:37
参加一个比赛,帮我改改,在线等你们!

Hello everyone, It’s really a great honnor to have this opportunity for introducing myself. I’m from Wenzhou middle school.My name is Vera .Now I’m 16.To be honest, I am a shy girl, so I hope my English pronunciation can be improved according to join this competition. In my spare time,I often go to the library.Reading is my favorite,especially the novel.I also like watching movis such as the Twilight,and the High School Musicial and so on.By the way,I like English,because it is a bridge,laking all countries togother.And I am working great hard in learning English.But I know it isn’t enough,so I will practice more often so as to improve myself.I think learning language is really hard but interesting,so I want to major in a foreign language in the future.But to be honest, I’m also interested in medical.It’s really hard for me to determine.And I think only the time will tell.That’s all,thank you for your attention.
帮我改得通畅点吧!!!
小细节!!!

1.according to join this competition 貌似这儿有点问题... 改成through joining this competition 或者 joining也不要啦
2.especially the novel 个人认为直接 especially novels
3. movis--movies
4.laking 是要表达“联系、联结”的意思吗?应该是把 linking 写错了吧...
5.I know it isn’t enough 没错,但我个人喜欢 I know that's not enough
稍微看了下,就发现这些吧,提点建议,祝你顺利!

很好了。。。不用改了

很好了!不用改了 !已经很不错了!修改了会更加糟糕!

我直接帮你改了,如下:

Good morning/afternoon/evening, ladies and gentlemen. It is really a great honor for me to have this opportunity to introduce myself here. I am Vera, a 16-year-old student from Wenzhou Middle School. To be honest, I am a shy girl, so I hope my particiption in this competition can help me improve my spoken English. I have various hobbies, among which reading is my favorite. In my spare time, I often go to the library to read books of my interest, especially novels. I also like watching movies such as Twilight, High School Musical, and so on. By the way, I like English be