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来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/05/03 00:34:53
No pains, no gains
Not long ago I saw a news that a person in Henan province win 360 million Yuan by buying lottery tickets. When I saw this news, I think it is none of my business. Then a few seconds later, I suddenly realized it is 360 million, so enviable figure! Be nice I were him.
But I just dreamed about it for a moment, then I came back to the real word. He is a lucky dog, the most lucky man all across China. He had a large sum of money, do what he want to do, go where he want to go, he and his family’s life will be changed. Perhaps this is unfortunate. As Chinese proverb said:” Misfortune, that is where happiness depends; happiness, that is where misfortune underlies.”
Everyone has dreams of riches, everyone wants to enjoy an easy life, while in general there are three means for accessing to wealth, The first one is to buy such lottery tickets and stocks to become a millionaire overnight, but this kind of person is too scarce, and they will have a strong sense o
Not long ago I saw a news that a person in Henan province win 360 million Yuan by buying lottery tickets. When I saw this news, I think it is none of my business. Then a few seconds later, I suddenly realized it is 360 million, so enviable figure! Be nice I were him.
But I just dreamed about it for a moment, then I came back to the real word. He is a lucky dog, the most lucky man all across China. He had a large sum of money, do what he want to do, go where he want to go, he and his family’s life will be changed. Perhaps this is unfortunate. As Chinese proverb said:” Misfortune, that is where happiness depends; happiness, that is where misfortune underlies.”
Everyone has dreams of riches, everyone wants to enjoy an easy life, while in general there are three means for accessing to wealth, The first one is to buy such lottery tickets and stocks to become a millionaire overnight, but this kind of person is too scarce, and they will have a strong sense o
1,第二行的 win 改为 won，这是过去的新闻，应该要用过去式。所以换成won。
2，Everyone has dreams of riches 应该改成 Everyone has dreams of being rich。
3，there are three means for accessing to wealth 中的 accessing 建议改为 approach。
4，even if they can enjoy a few years 这里应该换成 enjoy a few years’life。
5，sanctioned according to law 中的 according to 应该改为 By law。
6，one of the largest and most common way 中的 largest 应该换为 efficient 比较好，用largest 用词不当
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这篇文章真的写的好啊，好有哲理，让人深受启发，我感触好深啊。谢谢。。