UC知道我刚刚写的英文日记,帮我看看,挑挑毛病
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Today, I decide to write English diary every day. Of course my aim is to improve my English.I’m so lazy that I didn’t write too much about my life even in Chinese.But I’ll insist on writing in English becourse I want to succeed.
Today is my second day to invigilate mid-term exminations. Everything goes well. Most of the students obeyed the diciplines. I thought invigilating is an interesting thing, but now I know I was wrong.If you will be an invigilator the next day, you needn’t to prepare lessons. But you will feel tired and bored when invigilating. You must stand and stare at the students all the time.Tomrrow is the last day to invigilate. So I won’t annoy about that.
大家的建议都很好。可四楼的，你说 needn’t 是情态动词吗？我现在说的是“不需要做某事”。反正就是四楼的，说的第五句上面的这些，我不赞同。不过其他建议都很好，谢谢。
随便提几点。
1，过去的事都应该用过去时(Everything goes well.- went well )。
2，Tomrrow is the last day to invigilate. 应该用Tomorrow will be ...
3，保持一致的时态 （ I thought invigilating is an interesting thing － thought，was ）
4, 注意语感……
没毛病
不好
第三句注意转折，But I'm so lazy
第四句But宜换成However加，
二段三句thought后的应也为过去时，is改was
四句will be宜改为try to be，the next day宜改为one day，needn't是情态动词，后面不必加to。
五句when改为during
最后一句最后加any more
文章中today、so……but，because出现次数过多，读起来很是别扭。
用however、定语从句等更换相关句子来增强可读性。
没有什么语法错误 。
I decide to write English diary every day so that to improve my English.
With the reason that I want to succeed,I'll insist on writing in English by now.Even though I'm too lazy t to write more about my life in Chinese.
This day is my second mid-term exminations and everything goes well.The most students obeyed the diciplines. I thought invigilating is an interesting thing, but now I know I was wrong.If you will be a