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来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/05/13 01:02:52
Now I’d like to take you to a beautiful city – Vienna, the capital of Austria. It’s a city with a population of over 2million on the bank of the Danube River. The environment there is clean and tidy and it’s famous for it’s culture in the world. It’s such a good place that attracts large numbers of travelers here. At the same time it also catches a lot of musician’s eyes. For this, it’s also called the capital music.
If I can get a chance to go, I do take it.
谢谢了

Now I’d like to take you to a beautiful city – Vienna, the capital of Austria. It’s a city with a population of over 2million on the bank of the Danube River. The environment there is clean and tidy and it’s famous for it’s culture in the world. It’s such a good place that attracts large numbers of travelers here. At the same time it also catches a lot of musician’s eyes. For this, it’s also called the capital music.
If I can get a chance to go, I do take it.
谢谢了
suggestions:
1 on the bank of the Danube River---along the bank of the…
2. it’s culture---its culture(it’s means it is culture while its means a culture belongs to…)
3.it’s such a good place that attracts large…it’s such a good place that it attracts large…
4.For this---therefore
5.If I can get a chance to go, I do take it.---If I could get a chance to go, I would just seize it.

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