英语自荐信1

来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/05/21 07:03:18
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The reason why I stand here confidently is that I have a warm and democracy family. My patents, who are my first teachers, are different from others. They gave me a relaxing childhood. My mom, a teacher in university, influences me deeply with her view of life. She give me a lot of freedom and supports most of my decisions. But she is also strict with my falsity. She is a successful woman. Not only does she work well, but also have good manners in public which I think very important for me. My dad is a knowledgeable man who can answer my questions mostly and always take interesting examinations with me. Because of them, I had an exciting childhood that had fewer lessons and more games than many kids in China. Of course, this time they both agree with me to apply ASSIST and help me a lot. Without them, I cannot be so confident that I want to be an exchange student in America alone.
In the family I’m a baby forever, but at school I change a lot. I have a good health sinc

以下意见仅供参考，谢谢！
1.democracy是名词不可以做定语，可以改成“名主的”形容词：democratic

2.She give me a lot of freedom 那个GIVE要加S

3.falsity用法不对，一般是虚伪的意思，要写“错误”可以用：fault

4. My dad is a knowledgeable man who can answer my questions mostly and always take interesting examinations with me.这句的TAKE要加S。

5.Because of them，听起来不爽，不如改成“Thanks to them”
6. this time they both agree with me to apply ASSIST ,这句把前面改成“both of them”比they both 要好

7.Without them, I cannot be so confident that I want to be an exchange student in America alone.这句话应该拆成两句说比较容易让人看懂：without them, I would notbe so confident. I want to be an exchange student in America alone.

8.but at school I change a lot.可以说：but school life changes me a lot.

9. I have a good health since I’m child because of lots of exercise with my father and I’m good at football which I’ve been playing more than 8 years. 这句同样太长了，要拆开：I am in good health since I was a child, because I do lots of exerci