UC知道把我改作文：Great changes in my hometown
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Great changes in my hometown
I remember when I was a child ,my hometown was only a small city, And the fields were not far from my home. So if you want ti have a good breath, you could walk to that fields for having a good breath.
Now, about 15 years ago, my hometown has great changes. For example:every fields were changed into the big buildings ,and there are more and more cars across on the street here and there. But if you want to relax and have a good breath,you’d better to find the fields from the city edge..
I’m pleased to have this developed hometown, but I’ll never forget the home which was clean and beaut before then.
一定要先给个分数，我估一下我月考的分数！谢谢！
总分就是15分！
你的作文3处较严重语法错误，字写错了2个，标点大小写错误4处，内容有待充实。第一项最多8分，第二项最多12-3-6x0.5=6，这样14分左右。（声明：我没干过老师，看下面的标准来评的，仅供参考)
高考作文评分标准：
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1． 内容要求：
A档 10分 重点明确，内容充实
B档 8分 重点明确，内容较充实
C档 6分 重点明确，但内容单薄
D档 4分 重点不明确，内容松散
E档 2分 严重离题。
2． 语言要求：
⑴ 语言表达正确，文字流畅。（12分）
⑵ 语法、措词等错误，每处扣一分，同一错误不重复扣分。
⑶ 单词拼写、标点符号、大小写等错误，每处扣0.5分，同一错误不重复扣分。
⑷ 每句扣分不超过2分
⑸ 语言分最多扣12分
3． 组织结构要求：
凡内容和语言两部分得分超过16分，词数超过120个，并符合下列条件者可加分。
(1) 凡全文的措词、句子结构、上下文连贯性等方面较出色者，可酌情加1－2分。
(2) 凡内容充实、语言正确、句子连贯、用词贴切的优秀作文，可加3分。
4． 词数要求：
词数不足120个酌情扣分；词数少于60个，总分得分最多不超过10分。
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Great changes in my hometown
==>英文标题的大小写：实词（名词、动词、代词、形容词、副词等）首字母大写，虚词（介词、冠词、连词、感叹词）首字母小写。所以这样较好：
Great Changes in My Hometown
I remember when I was a child ,my hometown was only a small city, And the fields were not far from my home.
==>包括“And the fields were not far from my home”都是rem