UC知道请看我的这篇四级作文能得多少分呀？
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题目：按下面提纲写一篇不少于120词的作文。
1 许多人喜欢在除夕晚上看春节联欢晚会。
2 有人却提出取消春节联欢晚会。
3 你的看法。
我的作文
Spring Festival Gala on CCTV
Spring Festival Gala on CCTV has been held for over 20 years.During the past decade, it has attracted several generations of audience due to its large scale and wonderul performance.However,opinions concerning it are varied in recent years.
As is usual the case,there are still a great many people used to enjoying themselves by watching the Spring Festival Gala on CCTV,which adds to the atomasphere of happiness and harmony.The gala,consisting of many popular songs and funny plays,really facinates people a lot.Therefore,it is benificial to both the young and the old.
By contrast,others suggest that the Spring Festival Gala should be cancelled.The reasons why they believe so are as follows.To begin with,too many pop stars areinvited in recent years,which lengthens the distance from odinary people.Besides,adversting turns up ,tho
1 许多人喜欢在除夕晚上看春节联欢晚会。
2 有人却提出取消春节联欢晚会。
3 你的看法。
我的作文
Spring Festival Gala on CCTV
Spring Festival Gala on CCTV has been held for over 20 years.During the past decade, it has attracted several generations of audience due to its large scale and wonderul performance.However,opinions concerning it are varied in recent years.
As is usual the case,there are still a great many people used to enjoying themselves by watching the Spring Festival Gala on CCTV,which adds to the atomasphere of happiness and harmony.The gala,consisting of many popular songs and funny plays,really facinates people a lot.Therefore,it is benificial to both the young and the old.
By contrast,others suggest that the Spring Festival Gala should be cancelled.The reasons why they believe so are as follows.To begin with,too many pop stars areinvited in recent years,which lengthens the distance from odinary people.Besides,adversting turns up ,tho
对于四级水平，应经很不错，比我那时候强多了。如果没有拼写问题，我想应该可以13分以上。
以下是我对于文中不妥之处的拙见
1.However, opinions concerning it are varied in recent years.这句别扭
建议：In recent years, however, opinions concerning it varies much.
2.As is usual the case, 我觉得应该是as is usually the case。
3.facinate,拼错了，fascinate，想必是无心之过
4.which lengthens the distance from ordinary people，别扭
建议：which makes the Gala distant from ordinary people
5.Besides, ad turns up, though in an unobvious way.
别扭
建议：Besides, the Gala has become less resistive to commercial advertisement, which makes it less attractive to audience.
有一些语法错误，不过不严重。
总体来说，写作方式仍然套用中文的模式，应该多用英语的句法和习惯。
不过用词还不错，给你9-10分。
就是个12--13吧
不好说,我看这作文是套的,我看到好几篇于这很近的作文,估计上的是一个补习班的,希望不要被同一个评卷老师看到,不然审美疲劳就悲惨了! 我预计可以拿9分!