帮忙看看我这段英文有没有什么错误的地方

来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/06/02 21:44:08
First of all, my hobbies are always different with the other girls. I don’t like to play the games as the other girls do. Secondly, I like technological games. I think CS is much more interesting than common computer games. Thirdly, and also the most important one is that I learnt to cooperate with partners as well.

大概意思讲：第一，我的爱好总是不同于其他女生。我不喜欢玩那些女生喜欢玩的游戏。第二，我喜欢技术性的游戏。我认为CS比那些普通的电脑游戏更好玩。第三，也是最重要的一点，我从中也学会了与人合作。

different with改为 different from

as the other girls do 去掉 the

I like technological games改为I prefer the games with more skill requirement（仅供参考，个人意见）

去掉最后的as well ，我认为没有必要表达“‘也’这个意思”

with改成 from
have learned更好

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