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不知道楼上的想问什么？如果是英语自我介绍的话，我给个例子你，是关于研究生复试的：
Good morning. I am glad to be here for this interview. First let me introduce myself. My name is ***,24. I come from ******,the capital of *******Province. I graduated from the ******* department of *****University in July,2001. In the past two years I have been preparing for the postgraduate examination while I have been teaching *****in NO. ****middle School and I was a head-teacher of a class in junior grade two. Now all my hard work has got a result since I have a chance to be interviewed by you.

I am open-minded,quick in thought and very fond of history. In my spare time,I have broad interests like many other youngers.I like reading books,especially those about *******. Frequently I exchange with other people by making comments in the forum on line. In addition,during my college years,I was once a Net-bar technician. So,I have a comparative good command of network application. I am able to operate the computer we