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Hi,Sunil.When will my money be put into my (bank )account? How come you didn't mean what you said at all?

Hi~SUNIL.When does my money arrive my account number, your speech how doesn'tall keep a promise?

HI，Sunil.Please tell me When you will pay for the money to my account.Please make sure to carry out your promise.
--你好，Sunil.请告诉我，钱什么时候可以汇到我账号上，请兑现你的诺言。

这样会不会婉转点，楼主那样说话太冲了点。

Hey, SUNIL. My money when my account ，How you speak is not so .