请帮我看看这个英文申请有什么问题啊

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When asked about the reason of my selection,I really have no idea to answered.But I'd like to say something about my dream.

In the movie Shawshank Redemption,Andy told me what's faith and how to keep it.
Che Guevara let me know faith could make our dream come true,although he he may be a Tragic hero.

Nowadays,Cultural Industry bring people more and more methods to enjoy lives.
Particularly the cultural with national characteristics and traditions cultural.
Just like Yoga,it's popular in many areas.It become not only a religious act but also an entertainment approach.
Chinese traditional culture as Tai-Chi,the Book of Changes,Kung-Fu an d so on are attractive,too.
But I found such a phenomenon in this industry that the businessmen who managing this commodities may lack understanding of his commodities.
As a result,our tradition cultural still keep its mysterious mask.

Demands will lead to a big market. <

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2. 语法有点错误。

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When asked about the reason of my selection,I really have no idea to answer.But I'd like to say something about my dream.

In the movie Shawshank Redemption,Andy told me what is faith and how to keep it.
Che Guevara let me know that faith could make our dream come true,although he he may be a Tragic hero.

Nowadays,Cultural Industry brings people more and more methods to enjoy lives.
Particularly the cultural with national characteristics and traditional culture.
Just like Yoga,it's popular in many areas.It becomes not only a religious act but also an entertaining approach.
Chinese traditional culture as Tai-Chi,the Book of Changes,Kung-Fu an d so on are attractive,too.
But I found such a phenomenon in this industry that the businessmen who manage this commodities may lack understanding of his commodities.
As a result,our traditional culture still keep its