英语能手麻烦请进

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麻烦英语水平相当的帮藕修改一下这篇文章,指出错误的地方.中文的地方麻烦也帮我翻译一下.
It was the last day of military . It was as before hot.
八天过去了,今天终于进行军训比赛.Although we tried our best to do ,we have not won the competition. We were a little disappointed.
比赛结束后, I was allowed to go home ,but I was not happy at all. Because our drillmaster TONY had to return to his unit.离别的时候,TONY has cried ,we also have cried.因为我们都不会忘记这段美好的回忆.

it was the last day of military training. it was hot as usual. 8 days passed away,and finally today we had the match of military training. although we tried
our best to compete, we did not win. all of us were a little disappointed. after the match, i was allowed to go home, but i was not happy at all. because our drillmaster Tony had to return to his unit. when we depart with eath other, tony cried, so did we, because we wouldn't forget the beautiful memory.

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It was the last day of our military. It was as hot as before.8 years has passed,that day we were having the match finally.Although we tried our best,we didn't win the competition. We felt a little disappointed. After the match, I was allowed to go home ,but I was not happy at all. Because our drillmaster TONY had to return to his unit.At the departure time,TONY cried ,we also cried.But we won't forget those good times we had together.

It was the last day of our military training, with the we