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I like travel. Because it can make me happy and I can learn many things from
every places in theworld. I went travel with my mum when I was six. From then on,
I will go to a place that I haven’t been on each summer holiday. So I had been to
many places in the world. Like America, Thailand,Malaysia, Singapore…That’s the
overseas. In China, I had been to Guilin, Beijing, Hong Kong, Macao, Sit sang,
Guizhou… Oh, so many! I give a profundity impression of America and Sit sang.I
went to America with my classmate and teacher for 13 days. But with no parents.
That’s very interesting I think. So I must take care of myself. We had been to
San Francisco, Los Angel, New York and Washington D.C.. But L.A. is the most
interesting. Because There is a Disney and Hollywood. And it’s much bigger than
the one in Hong Kong!! Also Sit sang make me surprise. That’s the mostbeautiful
place that I had se

I liked travelling because it could make me happy and I could learn lots of things from
many places in the world. I went to travel with my mum when I was six. From then on,
I would go to a place that I haven’t been on each summer holiday. Furthermore, I had been to
many places in the world like America, Thailand,Malaysia, and so on. In China, I had been to Beijing, Hong Kong, Sit sang, ect. Oh, so many! I gave a profundity impression of America and Sit sang. I went to America with my class for 13 days. That was very interesting I thought. We had been to San Francisco, Los Angel, New York and Washington D.C.. I thought L.A. was the most
interesting place because there has Disney and Hollywood and it’s much bigger than
the one in Hong Kong!! Also, Sit sang made me surprise: it was the most beautiful place that I had seen. If I had a chance, I would show the photos of Sit sang to you!
I enjoyed travelling. That’s why the title of this article is “Tra