帮忙看下有没有语法或者用词错误-急!

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Named Yuki.
Aquarius Girl.
Born in 1984-03-18.
Have many shortcomings - Lazy/Passive/Timid/Dull & so on.
Always lose in daydream and behave like an idiolt.
Hate beating brains, that's too trouble to me.
Have lots of dreams , but none of them has be came true.
Be interested in Movie,Comic & Music.
Love Rock Music so much and have many favoured band.
The favorite charater of Comic is Yuki from <Fruits Basket> .
And this is the reason of where my name from.

大家帮忙看下 有错误指出
最好能继续修改或者补一下 我想口语化一些 不想用人称代词
回答得好的我会加分 拜托了

Always get lost in daydreaming……

Had lots of dream, but none of them came ture

Enjoy Movies, Comics and Music

many favourate bands.

favourate character from Comics is Yuki in <>
I name myself after her!

没错的我就没再抄一遍了

1.第三句里介词应该是“on”
2.第四句开头应该是“has”
不给你挑了，麻烦，直接重新给你写一个，错的都改过来了，如下：

Named Yuki.
Aquarius Girl.
Born in 1984-03-18.
Has many shortcomings - Lazy/Passive/Timid/Dull & so on.
Always indulge in her daydream and behave likes an idiolt.
Hate beating brains, that's too trouble to me.
Has lots of dreams , but none of them has been come true.
Being interested in Movie,Comic & Music.
Loving Rock Music so much and has many favourate bands.
The favourate charater of Comic is Yuki in <Fruits Basket> .
And this is the significance of my name.

Yuki., A quarius Girl.
Born in 1984-03-18.
Have many shortcomings - Laz