请帮我看看有没有什么语法错误，谢谢！

来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/05/18 02:35:42
“The guest in Room 1802 was an E-Long member. The FD staff told him the room rate included two breakfasts when he checked in, but when he went into GVC, he was told the rate excludes breakfast.”

倒数第二个单词excludes应该换成excluded,保持时态一致.

对的。没有错误

我觉得没什么问题。
不过逗号是不是太多了？

The guest in Room 1802 was an E-Long member. The FD staff told him the room rate included two breakfasts when he checked in. But when he went into GVC, he was told that the rate excludes breakfast.