仅一个英语改错---30分

playing computer games is becoming more and more popular with people,especially students.

把with去掉

with 改成for
especially for students

把 especially with students中的with 删了

Playing computer games is becoming more and more popular, especially within students.

Playing computer games in becoming more and more popular with people,especially the students.
the students 我还不是很确定,这个复数前面应该可以加the

playing computer games ARE becoming more and more popular with people,especially with students