英语高手改改俺的作文好吗?谢谢啦
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My uncle and grandma are waiting for us when we get there.They show their happiness for our coming.When Igive the presents to grandma,she really feel happy with a smile.
We set down to talk and my uncle go to prepare for the lunch.The lunch is so nice that we all enjoy it.At 4:00 we say goodbay to eachother and come back to home
感谢大家的热情帮助,我一定会努力进步的!!!
我帮你改了几处,你的思路很清晰,但是有一点很重要,你却忘记了,这是一篇类似日记的东西,叙述的是过去的事情,除了第一句,其他就一定要用过去式.
具体改的地方还有:
1,爸爸妈妈还有我决定给祖母买礼物.你加了一个first,不知道你要表达什么意思,如果你要表达"起初","首先",后面并没有与之呼应的词.如果你想表示"立刻,马上",可以用immediately.
2,We set down to talk and my uncle go to prepare for the lunch.
你是想说我们坐下来谈话的话,set就要改成sit 的过去式sat,如果你想表达我们开始谈话,用set down to do sth是可以的.后面的叔叔go to prepare for the lunch,你叔叔肯定是去准备午饭,也就是说是他去做饭了,而不是为了这顿饭,他自己做准备,所以应改为prepare the lunch.
3, At 4:00 we said goodbay to eachother and came back home
goodbye你拼错了. 这个eachother你再考虑一下,你想表达我们相互说了再见,但似乎只是表示两个人之间.
别的没什么了,个人意见仅供参考.
Today is my grandma's birthday.Father,mother and I decided to buy some presents for her.Then we took a bus to grandma's home.
My uncle and grandma were waiting for us when we got there.They showed their happiness for our coming.When I gave the presents to grandma,she really felt happy with a smile.
We sat down to talk and my uncle went to prepare