请看看这段简历有那些错误

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As a technical sales manager, I kept close technical contact with the TV set manufacturers for example Thomson、TCL、KONKA. I shown the new production to the customers and known the customers demand. We founded the group to research the customers demand and form the plan. We try to improve the production or make a new model to accord with the customers demand.
I have participated in examination of ISO9001. I have participated in SMART21, QCC and so on tests to advance productive efficiency, reduce waste in the company.

做了些修改，改后如下：
As a technical sales manager, I kept close contact with the TV set manufacturers such as Thomson、TCL and KONKA. I shown new products to the customers and understood their demands. We founded a group to research the customers' demands and set targeting plans. We try to improve the production or make a new model to satisfy the customers.
I have participated in the examination of ISO9001. I have participated in SMART21, QCC and other tests to boost productive efficiency, as well as reduce waste in the company.