UC知道高考英语作文，希望得到批改
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这是我写的一篇高考模拟作文，满分是30分，希望得到各位高手的批改。请帮我更正用错的词汇和语法并提供具体讲解和错误原因。
如果您对高考评分比较了解，更希望您能帮我估分！非常感谢。
题目：
最近有人提出取消春节联欢晚会，引起了一场争论，下列是各自的理由。请描述争论情况，谈谈自己看法。
支持取消：1.节目每年大同小异 2.其他娱乐方式很多，不必花那么多人力物力搞春晚
反对取消：1.春节联欢晚会是中国文化的一部分，是连接华人的纽带。2.没有春节联欢晚会，年轻人会出去娱乐；老年人被留在家会孤独。
我的作文：
Recently,some people come up with an idea that the Spring Festival Gala should be canceled which bring out a arguement.
People who agree with this idea hold that each year's performances in the Spring Festival Gala are similar. And nowadays,people have more ways to enjoy themselves.So there dosen't seem much point in spending much money and manpower holding the Spring Festival Gala.
However,a coin has two sides. Other people take an opposite side.They believe that the Spring Festival Gala is a part of chinese culture and a link between chinese.Without the Spring Festival Gala,yound people would rathar go out to have entertainment than stay at home.If so,the old should
如果您对高考评分比较了解，更希望您能帮我估分！非常感谢。
题目：
最近有人提出取消春节联欢晚会，引起了一场争论，下列是各自的理由。请描述争论情况，谈谈自己看法。
支持取消：1.节目每年大同小异 2.其他娱乐方式很多，不必花那么多人力物力搞春晚
反对取消：1.春节联欢晚会是中国文化的一部分，是连接华人的纽带。2.没有春节联欢晚会，年轻人会出去娱乐；老年人被留在家会孤独。
我的作文：
Recently,some people come up with an idea that the Spring Festival Gala should be canceled which bring out a arguement.
People who agree with this idea hold that each year's performances in the Spring Festival Gala are similar. And nowadays,people have more ways to enjoy themselves.So there dosen't seem much point in spending much money and manpower holding the Spring Festival Gala.
However,a coin has two sides. Other people take an opposite side.They believe that the Spring Festival Gala is a part of chinese culture and a link between chinese.Without the Spring Festival Gala,yound people would rathar go out to have entertainment than stay at home.If so,the old should
我是英语专业大三的学生，给你指出几处我认为还需要修改的地方吧
1.recently ,nowadays,可以直接用于句首或句尾做时间状语，逗号不用要，但这点在高考中可能不会细作追究，一般不扣分。
2.People who agree with this idea hold……中this指代不明，会扣分，应先说明那个观点，再做分析，扣2~3分吧
3.in the Spring Festival Gala 介词用on ,扣0.5~1分
4.people have more ways to enjoy themselves,So there dosen't seem much point ……给我的感觉不很地道，有点中式英语，试试看这样说people can enjoy themselves in other diffrent ways like tavelling。In fact,every year we spend much money and money and manpower holding it.多次提到的完全可以用it来替代，最好再查查字典seem的用法，你使用的方法是错误的，扣几分不清楚。
5.a link between the whole country
6.书写认真点young
7.弄清主被动关系the old should be stayed at home lonely
要是我给分的话20分左右
最后的那句最好不要用作结尾，因为是要表明你自己的观点，并不是叫你去引出别人的观点