英语高手帮忙修改下这日志的语病，语法时态等

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我是初一的学生，用金山词霸辅助下写了一片关于地震的英语日志，请帮我找找那里错了好么？

the Disaster's began on 5.12 in China ,
I thought that are terrifying things
As a Chinese ,
We should help the displaced person ,
Although a person's lack of power ,
We can't change the ture ,
But we can send our love to them ,
The world will have more love ,
Let us send our love together ,
To help them to spend the ‘Black Day' !

虽然错的蛮多的，但是初一就有这样的精神很不错。上面的一帮垃圾不要乱写，会被人笑死的！我在加拿大读大学的，我帮你改一下。

An 7.9 magnitude earthquake struck China on 12 May, 2008. I think that was a terrifying cataclysm. As Chinese, We should help those survivors. Although one person just has a little power and no one can change the truth, we also can present our love to those survivors. If we did that, the world would have more love. Let's present our love to help them to through the "Dark days"!

The Disaster began on May 12nd in China .
I thought that is a terrifying thing .
As a Chinese,one should help the persons who suffered from the disaster .
A person's strength is limited ,we can't change the truth.
But we can send our love to them .
The world will have more love ,
Let us get our love together to help them to survive the ‘Black Day' !

Disaster came on may 12 in China ,
I thought that is a terrified thing
As a person of china ,
We should h