英文作文改正

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这是一篇我写的动物的小论文，要交上去平凡，但是其中有很多不足的地方，我自己又不知道在哪，希望大家多多帮助，欢迎大家来找茬！实在是谢谢各位啦！
Polar bear
Draft:
Polar bears are one of the largest carnivores in the world; their fur is thicker than any other bears. It even covers their feet while provide warmth and traction on the ice. After a period of molting, their fur will change color from pure white to a yellowish shade. They also have black skin, nose, lips and a long neck. In the natural course of events, adult males can reach 550-1700 lbs and females can reach 200-700 lbs in weight, and grow up to 8 to 10 feet tall. The oldest polar bear, as far as people know, had lived 45 years. estimated that there are between 20,000 and 25,000 polar bears in the world.
2location +diet
The most important habitat for polar bears is the edge of the pack ice in the Arctic. Throughout this region which includes Alaska, Canada, and Russia, etc. Polar bears travel the majority of time throughout the year in search

Draft:

Polar bears are one of the largest carnivores in the world, with a fur thicker than any other bear. Their fur is what protects their feet by providing warmth and traction why they are on the ice. After a period of molting, the polar bears' fur will change color, from a pure white to a shade of yellow. These bears also have black skin, a nose, lips, and a long neck. In natue, adult males can reach anywhere betwen 500 to 1700 pounds, and females can reach 200 to 700 pounds, while reching a height from about 8 to 10 feet tall. The oldest polar bear, as far as anyone knows, lived for 45 years, and estimates show that there are currently between 20,000 to 25,000 polar bears in the world.

2. location + diet:

The most important habitat for polar bears is the edge of the pack ice in the Arctic, a regon which includes Alaska, Canada, Russia, and various other countries. Polar spend the majority of their time throughout the year traveling in search