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I can succeed
I have a dream,I can succeed.To have a great achievement in future and become the most successful woman.I believed, so long as I diligently.Why am I quite confident?Because I believe my ability and willpower will let me become an excellent person.
I have ever heard a well-known saying:"Catch the star that holds your destiny,the one that forever twinkles within your heart. Take advantage of precious opportunities while they still sparkle before you. Always believe that your ultimate goal is attainable as long as you commit yourself to it."
Suddenly,I found out I must never give up if I 'd like to achieve my goal!Though barriers may sometimes stand in the way of my dreams,I'll remember that my destiny is hiding behind them.The greatest gifts in life are not purchased,but acquired through hard work and determination.
It's difficult for us to succeed,but all of us can do anything perfectly on the premise that we should try o
I have a dream,I can succeed.To have a great achievement in future and become the most successful woman.I believed, so long as I diligently.Why am I quite confident?Because I believe my ability and willpower will let me become an excellent person.
I have ever heard a well-known saying:"Catch the star that holds your destiny,the one that forever twinkles within your heart. Take advantage of precious opportunities while they still sparkle before you. Always believe that your ultimate goal is attainable as long as you commit yourself to it."
Suddenly,I found out I must never give up if I 'd like to achieve my goal!Though barriers may sometimes stand in the way of my dreams,I'll remember that my destiny is hiding behind them.The greatest gifts in life are not purchased,but acquired through hard work and determination.
It's difficult for us to succeed,but all of us can do anything perfectly on the premise that we should try o
首先To have a great achievement in future and become the most successful woman这不是一句话
I believed, so long as I diligently？diligently是副词，改成I belive I can realize my dream as long as I work diligently
will let me become an excellent person最好改成will enable me to ……
I have ever heard 改成 I have once heard