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Recently,the phenomenon of empty nest has become the focus of the sosiety.more and more olders live by themselves.

In my opinion,the reasons are as follows:First of all,many old people's chlidren are very busy everyday,it is hard to them to spent sometime living with their parents.What's more,some people work in other cities,even in other countries,it is impossible for them to live together with their parents or come back home frequently.In the third place,old people's cultural life usually be ignored.Some people think that their parents' material life are rich and varied,they should be happy.So these people don't to see their parents very often.

As for my own idea about the phenomenon of empty nest,I think that no matter how busy you are,you should spent some time together with your parents.If you work in other cities or countries,you should often speak to your parents through telephone.
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