这篇英文作文是甚麼程度？哪里还需要修改？

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如题，这篇文算初中还是高中程度呢？
有甚麼需要改善的地方,请指出
各位,谢啦
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In this day and age,it is not uncommon to hear that lots of news about some successful models.After reading this poster of the competition,I would like to to train as a model.In this essay,I will explain the reasons for my choice.

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先不评价这篇文章是什么程度，帮楼主润色了一下句子，顺便改了几个错别字，供楼主参考。

Train to be a model

Nowadays,it is not unusual to hear lots of news about many successful models.After reading this poster about the competition,I would like to be trained as a model.In this essay,I will explain the reasons of my choice.

First and foremost,my dream is to become a famous model.To improve my fashion skill,I read fashion magazines every day and learn how to use cosmetics, to change my hair style and how to
buy beautiful and fashionable clothes. It goes without saying ,I usually watch TV programmes about fashion.I think that I have a sense in fashion and hope that I can enter the course .

Furthermore, I am sure that I will become a competent model!I am a graduate and got a diploma from a fashion school.Also,I have joined some competitions about dancing and catwalk and I won some prizes.Besides,I am tall and good looking.If I could join the course,I would meet many models from