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OG的独立写作:年轻人是否该脱离父母
改得好有加分
There is no surprise when a young adult want to have fully independence from his or her parents. The wish to depend on oneself is quite comprehendible. However, I do not think it’s a good idea to break away from parents at an early age.
First of all, parents are much more sophisticated than young adults. They are more likely to have adapted to the rules of society. In other words, they can provide their children valuable advices when they meet certain kinds of difficulty. These advices come from many years’ experience which the young adults don’t own.
Besides, the reason for the young to live apart from their parents is the wish to escape the control of parents. But think again, why do they want to control their dear children? The answer is just they love their children, as simple as that. They don’t want their children to go in a wrong way, facing frustration at an early age. Won’t you give instructions to your children when they are at a
改得好有加分
There is no surprise when a young adult want to have fully independence from his or her parents. The wish to depend on oneself is quite comprehendible. However, I do not think it’s a good idea to break away from parents at an early age.
First of all, parents are much more sophisticated than young adults. They are more likely to have adapted to the rules of society. In other words, they can provide their children valuable advices when they meet certain kinds of difficulty. These advices come from many years’ experience which the young adults don’t own.
Besides, the reason for the young to live apart from their parents is the wish to escape the control of parents. But think again, why do they want to control their dear children? The answer is just they love their children, as simple as that. They don’t want their children to go in a wrong way, facing frustration at an early age. Won’t you give instructions to your children when they are at a
没有任何意外时，一个年轻的成年人想拥有完全独立于他或她的父母。希望依靠自己很可理解的 。但是，我不认为这是一个好主意，摆脱家长在早期阶段。
首先，父母更先进的比年轻的成年人。他们更有可能已经适应了社会的规则。换句话说，他们可以提供宝贵的意见和他们的孩子时，满足某些种类的困难。这些建议来自许多年的经验，这些年轻的成年人没有自己。
此外，年轻的原因，生活除了他们的父母是想逃避父母的控制。但再想一想，为什么他们要控制自己亲爱的孩子？答案是他们热爱自己的孩子，就这么简单。他们不希望自己的孩子去了错误的方式，面对挫折早龄。不会给你的指示，你的孩子当他们正处于一个关键时刻，如选择的大学，甚至结婚？你有何感想，如果你的孩子拒绝您的建议，只是想你想控制自己的生活？
这些事实来自几代人之间的误解。每个人都认为不同，更不用说不同的后代。家长认为自己的孩子叛逆，而青年认为他们的父母老式。他们都没有站在对方的观点。但是，通信只是介乎尊重对方。如果他们可以想像自己是对方，思想更加对方，代沟可能会消失。从某种程度上来说，这是爱，导致这样一个问题。和爱可以解决这个问题的另一种途径。
写的不错，为什么修改？？