高人请进：IELTS作文修改

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Some people think that we should teach different children together, and others think the intelligent children should be taught separately. Discuss and give your own opinion.
Nowadays, there exist many aspects in education that need reforming. One of them is weather we should separating students to study is dependent on their different intelligence. Personally, I am not in favor of this opinion, and I will qualify it to some extent in this essay.
Firstly, the most successful education method is that put students with different grades, race, family background together. Because, the aim of study is not only achieving high grades but more learning the whole world. More exactly, after students graduate from school, they will meet all kinds of people with different education background and character, and weather they could communicate with those individuals fluently is the determinant to their success. Therefore, campus as a minimize society should provide opportunity to access to

呵呵 我28号刚考完，虽然我水平不怎么样，不过也写了几篇，都是按老师给的模板写的，感觉你的分段有问题，雅思考试写作一般都是分4-5短的，反正剑桥后面的高分范文一般都是这么分的，
第一段：背景、双方或一方观点、我的观点
第二-三/四段是主题段：每段写支持你观点的理由
最后是结尾段：总结一下，重申你的观点，和理由，然后再写点别的像建议什么的
你这篇好像是3G的预测吧- - 我正好没写，我写的是老师给预测的

老人住养老院好还是家里好
Many people point out that the old should be taken care at home.But towards the same issue,many others hold the view that old people should be placed in old people's house.For my part,I absolutely agree with the latter point of view.There are numerous reasons why I hold this opinion and I would explore a few of the most significant one's here.

One very strong argument is that the old people have similar hobby,so that they have same topic to chat together.In addition,they could make friends with each other through this way.On the contrary,if they have no friends together,they feel lonely.So they will catch some other questions such as bad emotions and diseases of mind.

Another reason why I perfer the argume