UC知道急!未来10小时内要~谁帮我改下这篇作文~~谢了!
来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/06/05 19:44:29
个人简介老师要求到时要说介绍自己,但要主要说出自己的性格和价值观~~还不能用HELPFUL,KIND一类较简单的词
firstly,my name is cindy.I am a active and energetic person.I like music and dance.In our class, we had taken a personlity test.It said I am a emotional people. It also said I am a perceiver person who like use feeling to slove the problems.I think it is reson why i like music and dance.Because i can put my feeling in it.I can use music or dance tell people what is my feeling.
大家再帮我想想有什么关于VALUE的词...我实在不知道怎么写VALUE...
firstly,my name is cindy.I am a active and energetic person.I like music and dance.In our class, we had taken a personlity test.It said I am a emotional people. It also said I am a perceiver person who like use feeling to slove the problems.I think it is reson why i like music and dance.Because i can put my feeling in it.I can use music or dance tell people what is my feeling.
大家再帮我想想有什么关于VALUE的词...我实在不知道怎么写VALUE...
修改如下：
Firstly,my name is Cindy.I am an active and energetic person.I like music and dance.In our class, we ever took a personality test.It showed that I am an emotional people. It also said I am a perceiver person who like to use feelings to slove the problems.I think it is why i like music and dance.I can use music or dance to tell people my feelings.
帮你稍微改了一下，包括语法与衔接，但是你总是在强调你是个感性的人，喜欢音乐和舞蹈。跟你的价值观有什么联系吗？我不知道你的价值观是什么。所以不知道怎么帮你写价值观。你觉得什么是有意义的事情，你觉得人生什么是重要的。都可以说。你说个中文就可以帮你写了。前面写的问题主要是，重复强调你感性喜欢音乐舞蹈，很没意思。
别的不说，名字大写吧？