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1、to those whom understands no significance,art tend to be defined...
(1)whom--->who，修饰those的从句中who是做主语，而不是考虑前面是不是有to.
(2)tend to --->tends to,art的动词必须用单数。

2、 However, to those whom realizes the application of art and its true meaning,
whom--->who，理由同上
realizes--->realize

3、in order to fully comprehend the message communicated in the art
in--->by， 不过这里可以不改吧，个人觉得in其实也可以。

4、but indicates nothing, as though a lie.
as though a lie--->as though it was a lie，as though一般是接从句，较少见接名词，接从句时必须用虚拟语气。

5、 The author uses many methods of art to enhance the story and impress the readers.
uses--->used,作者的行为是过去发生的，应该用过去时。

6、She repeatedly applies many motifs to the story, such as music, façade and breath that marks great feelings and impression on readers as they read her literature.
（1）applies--->applied,理由同5
（2）marks--->gave,留下深刻印象，一般不用mark，mark是做标记，而且一般指实物的标记；时态从主