帮我修改翻译稿

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要求很简单,尽量改得更加压韵-----你甚至可以只改其中一段.改的好的追加一定分数.

White Lion ------- Lady of the Valley
白狮乐队------------山谷中的女士

lady of the valley山谷中的女士
can you hear me cry in the sillness of the night你能在黑夜的边缘听见我的哭泣吗?
I have lost my brother in the fights of the war我在战争的打斗中失去了兄弟
and my heart has broken down我的心已经破败

In the night I cry but no one seems to hear在夜晚我哭泣 但似乎没人能够听见
I step into the light but all I feel is fear我步入光芒 但我感受到的惟有恐惧

lady of the valley山谷中的女士
can you bring him back to the days when we were kids你能把他带回我们童年时吗
once we were together我们曾经在一起
we stood young and strong我们仍然年轻力壮
now it seems so long ago现在一切似乎发生在很久以前

the golden key is at the end of the chain金色的钥匙在锁链的末端
how it hurts ohh lady free me from this pain

in the night I cry to the lady of the valley在夜晚中我对山谷中的女士哭泣
cause I'll die without the lady of the valley因为没有她我会死去
in the night I call to the lady of the valley在夜晚中我对山谷中的

女孩,在那山谷
是否在夜的边界听到我的哭诉
我在战争中失去了手足
心也已经破碎无助

在夜里,无人理睬我的痛哭
恐惧不会消失,即使站在光明处

女孩,在那山谷
能否把他带回我们曾经的童年国度
曾经如影随形
曾经强壮年轻
但那似乎遥远如梦境

White Lion ------- Lady of the Valley
白狮乐队------------山谷中的女人

lady of the valley山谷中的女人
can you hear me cry in the sillness of the night你是否能在黑夜的边缘听见我的哭泣?
I have lost my brother in the fights of the war我在战争的打斗中失去了兄弟
and my heart has broken down我的心已经麻痹

In the night I cry but no one seems to hear在夜晚我哭泣 但似乎没人能够听见
I step into the light but all I feel is fear我步入光芒 但我感受到的惟有恐慌

lady of the valley山谷中的女人
can you bring him back to the days when we were kids你能否把他带回我们童年
once we were together我们曾经相随
we stood young and strong我们仍然年轻力壮
now it seems so long ago现在一切似乎发生在很久以前

the golden key is at the end of the chain金色的钥匙在锁链的末端
how it hurts ohh lady free me from this pain

in the night I cry to the lady of