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Life is like a box of chocolates, you never know what you gonna get. I decide to become a famous pastry cook as the next chocolate that I get.
When I was a child, I thought that the pastry cook has magic because they can make a beautiful and delicious cake in a short period time, so when I pass by the workroom of baker, I always watch them to make cake through the window. Compared with other child, my dream is strange. Many children have a dream that become a scientist or a president when they grow up, but my dream is become a pastry cooker. My mother and father support me too. Sometimes my classmates laughed at my dream, my parents told me that what job you will do is not decided by how much money you will get, but whether you like it or not, just do the job you like is wonderful. I think they contribute a lot to I have the idea that become a pastry cooker. I like eat delicious food when I was a child because my family likes eating very much, especially nosh. My parents usually
When I was a child, I thought that the pastry cook has magic because they can make a beautiful and delicious cake in a short period time, so when I pass by the workroom of baker, I always watch them to make cake through the window. Compared with other child, my dream is strange. Many children have a dream that become a scientist or a president when they grow up, but my dream is become a pastry cooker. My mother and father support me too. Sometimes my classmates laughed at my dream, my parents told me that what job you will do is not decided by how much money you will get, but whether you like it or not, just do the job you like is wonderful. I think they contribute a lot to I have the idea that become a pastry cooker. I like eat delicious food when I was a child because my family likes eating very much, especially nosh. My parents usually
第二句有点不清晰，建议改为But becoming a pastry cook is always the chocolate I'm dreaming to taste.It might be bitter due to a lot of hardwork ahead of me ,but it might also be sweet as it has been my ideal career.第三句the pastry cook 为特指，应该为类指pastry cooks have magic,还有，用高级词汇exquisite and palatable代替beautiful and delicious;whenever 代替when.watch them make,而不是to make.就先写这些了，希望自己再好好润色一下。
第一句是<阿甘正传>里的吧。。。