UC知道雅思 小作文 英文：表示数据的几个句子如何改写？
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我自己写的，觉得写的很啰嗦能不能改的和谐一点？
In terms of different age groups，rock music and pop music albums were most prevent in the group whose ages are between 16 to 24. with almost 32% and 26% of them purchased ,respectively. 。Moreover，those aged between16 to 24 and those aged from 35 to 44 followed the same pattern. Almost 34％ and 24％ of Those aged between16 to 24 consumed rock music and pop music albums while that in those aged from 35 to 44 were 24％ and 18％respectively. However，classic music albums owned 22％ consumers whose aged 45 or over which is while pop music and rock music albums attracted only 5％ and 6％ people in that age group.
In terms of different age groups，rock music and pop music albums were most prevent in the group whose ages are between 16 to 24. with almost 32% and 26% of them purchased ,respectively. 。Moreover，those aged between16 to 24 and those aged from 35 to 44 followed the same pattern. Almost 34％ and 24％ of Those aged between16 to 24 consumed rock music and pop music albums while that in those aged from 35 to 44 were 24％ and 18％respectively. However，classic music albums owned 22％ consumers whose aged 45 or over which is while pop music and rock music albums attracted only 5％ and 6％ people in that age group.
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