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题目：Students at schools and universities learn far more from lessons with teachers than from others sources (such as the internet, television).To what extent do you agree or disagree?
As a famous saying goes “Teachers are the engineers of human souls”, which means teachers play a really vital role in inculcating knowledge and helping promote students moral and intellectual development. However, the proliferation such as television and internet, enable students get knowledge and information without difficulties, thus, some people hold that teachers can be totally replaced.
It is no denial that the various knowledge channels bring a lot conveniences to students. For instance, by Utilizing the Search Engine such as google or baidu, a large sums of information appears in screen within seconds. But we should not ignore that the content on the Internet or TV is often misleading and sex and violence are usually flagrantly shown in an explicit way. Without the teacher's care
As a famous saying goes “Teachers are the engineers of human souls”, which means teachers play a really vital role in inculcating knowledge and helping promote students moral and intellectual development. However, the proliferation such as television and internet, enable students get knowledge and information without difficulties, thus, some people hold that teachers can be totally replaced.
It is no denial that the various knowledge channels bring a lot conveniences to students. For instance, by Utilizing the Search Engine such as google or baidu, a large sums of information appears in screen within seconds. But we should not ignore that the content on the Internet or TV is often misleading and sex and violence are usually flagrantly shown in an explicit way. Without the teacher's care
有6.5+吧
不过还是有语法错误
例如：
1. But we should not ignore that the content on the Internet or TV is often misleading and sex and violence are usually flagrantly shown in an explicit way.
因为这个句子其实有不是紧密联系一起的两部分，所以要在“and sex and violence ”前加“，”。
2. 有ON THE OTHER SIDE 一般之前都需要出现ON ONE SIDE,不然结构不对称
3.Teachers can and make interaction and communication with students, giving students emotional support, but do computers and TV know what emotion is and how to encourage students?
"Teachers can and make interaction”？应该改为Teachers can interact and communicate with students, and give them emotional supports.....
4.第二段结尾的疑问句很好，提出问题让人思考，是出彩的地方。但是第三段又有，就显得太多了。建议将其中一句改为肯定句。
其他的问题就自己发觉洛，总的来讲是一篇很好的文章。
分数不太会打哦
建议第一段要把自己的观点清晰地明确地提出来，很重要吧。
有一点点小的错误，自己再看一遍肯定能发现的~
总的挺好的~