麻烦看下这段话都那里有错误，谢谢

这是改完的.基本没什么错误，很好.

Nancy lived in London with her two daughters. Nancy’s life was pretty good. She liked outdoor life in London more than before.
Nancy often danced tap-dancing in her spare time.

is-was
ago-before
there去掉，在than后面加where
has often danced改为often danced

Nancy’s life was pretty good.
She liked outdoor life in London than where she lived in ago.

我感觉第2行 IN LONDON后边应该加上BETTER 比较级嘛

Nancy lived in London with her two daughters. Nancy’s life was pretty good. She liked outdoor life in London than she lived there ago.
Nancy had often danced tap-dancing in her spare time

Nancy’s life was pretty good.
She liked outdoor life in London than where she lived in ago.
Nancy often danced tap-dancing in her free time