请英语高手改错

什么东西啊？怪怪的。像是幼儿园教的一首儿歌。不太懂这类语法规则
On (one)day.(,)Tony see(sees) the wall is white.Take （Takes）a piece of chalk and draws a doll in(on) the wall.Ben see(sees) a doll in the wall.Take （Takes）a piece of chalk and draws a sun in(on) the wall.Jim see(sees) a doll and a sun in(on) the wall.Take（Takes） a piece of chalk and draws a stick in (on)the wall.Lisa see (sees)a doll,a sun and a stick(on) in the wall.Paints(Painting) pictures on the wall is wrong.So clean the wall.friend(Friends),who's right?

chlak应该是chalk粉笔

One day,Tony sees the wall is white.He takes a piece of chalk and draws a doll on the wall. When Ben sees a doll on the wall he takes a piece of chalk and draws a sun on the wall. When Jim sees a doll and a sun on the wall, he take a piece of chalk and draws a stick on the wall. While Lisa sees a doll,a sun and a stick on the wall she thinks painting pictures on the wall is wrong.So she cleans the wall. Friend,who's right?

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