UC知道帮我改一下错吧，语法，时态．．．．
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Last month, Toby had a birthday party. His parents gave him a present. It was a mobile phone. Toby liked it very much.
Toby thought the mobile phone could help him communicate better with other people. He could use it when he was in trouble or he had something to tell somebody.
At first, Toby only used it to call his parents. A few weeks later, he found out that the phone had many games. And also, he could send short messages to people. He think this mobile phone was so nice.
One day evening, Toby received a short message from a strange person. It said: " Hello! Are you a boy or a girl ? Ha, you are a lucky person. My name is Jay. Do you know me ? I am very famous. I want to make a friend with you! " Toby was surprised, he liked Jay very much. He is Jay’s fan. So, he wrote a short message quickly. All the evening Toby wrote short messages. He didn’t do his homework. He was excited and very happy. the next day, when he was in cal
第七行：think → thought
第八行：去掉 day；strange person → stranger
第十行：a friend → friends；surprised 后的逗号改为句号
第十一行：is → was；wrote → typed；all the evening → the whole evening
第十六行：do → take
第十八行：went → got；home 后的句号改为逗号
第十九、二十行：冒号改为逗号
第二十二行：and improve 改为 to improve 可能更好一点
第二十三行：to study → in studying
最后一行：however 前的逗号应改为句号
注：阁下的某些单词拼错了，估计应该可以察觉，在下在此不提了。如有意见可提出。
这么长！短一点不行吗？！看都看晕了
第3段found out好象应该去掉 out
think 应该是thought
One day evening-->In one day evening
He is Jay’s fan-->He is one of Jay's fans
played with -->play
give you-->give it to you
because you know 去掉know
小小意见，仅供参考
Toby’s birthday present
Last month, Toby had a birthday party. His parents gave him a present. It was a mobile phone. Toby liked it very much.
Toby thought the mobile phone can help him communicate with other people more conveniently. He can use it when he is in trouble or he have something to t