帮我改一封给美国教授的英语信件,谁改的多,给谁加分

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dear Dr. ××:
I am ×× from ×× university, and professor ×× you know is my tutor. did
you have a good time with us in Beijing in summer this year?
I thought I got many constructive suggestions about studying aboard from
you, and thank you very much.
one of my classmates, named ** ,and I have prepared a paper titled
"*************" to submit to "Journal of *****", and professor *** has dominate
you as a reviewer. if you recieve the paper
,we will appreciate you for your review. that will be the best instructions
for me.
Besides, I have another important thing need your help.Next year, i will
got my master degree.I am ready for continuing my researchwork and wanna attend
to some doctoral program. I think you might have got well known with many professor
, would you please do me a favor and recommend me to some tutor or team in USA or other
country?thank you

dear Dr. ××: 通篇要注意大小写!
I am ×× from ×× university, and professor ×× you know is my tutor. you know作为插入语要有逗号隔开
did you have a good time with us in Beijing in summer this year? in summer this year, this summer即可

I thought I got many constructive suggestions about studying aboard from you, and thank you very much.
I think即可. 不是过去想.

one of my classmates, named ** ,and I have prepared a paper titled "*************" to submit to "Journal of *****",
one of my classmates, named ** : XX, one of my classmates.
submit 是提交,下级向上级,给杂志社用send即可.

and professor *** has dominate you as a reviewer.
dominate: 有命令的口吻, 可以换一个词语试试看,如推荐.

if you recieve the paper ,we will appreciate you for your review. that will be the best instructions for me.
instruction: guidance.

Besides, I have another important thing need your help.
I have another favor to ask.

Next year, i will got my maste