点评我的英语日记

来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/05/11 21:38:16
Do you want to know about my morning ? I usually get up at 5:00 . At 6:00 I eat breakfast, then I go to school at 6:20.For afternoon, I usually eat lunch at 14:00.

do you want to know my morning? I usually get up at 5a.m. At 6o'clock I enjoy my breakfast, then I go to school at 6:20. In the afternoon, I usually have my lunch at 2p.m.

注意名词前面都要加冠词哈。比如说是have my lunch, 写成have lunch就不好了。
注意借此的时候哈，For afternoon是你不小心写错的吧呵呵。
还有注意文章不要重复太多，适当的利用其他方法避免重复，可以让你的文章看上去不会很BORING。
谢谢，加油哦。

Do you want to know（somrthing） about my morning ? I usually get up at 5:00 . At 6:00 I （have）breakfast, then I go to school at 6:20.(in the) afternoon, I usually (have) lunch at 14:00

Do you want to know（+something） *about my morning(about me in the moring)* ? I usually get up at 5:00 . At 6:00 I （have）breakfast, then I go to school at 6:20.(in the) afternoon, I usually (have) lunch at 14:00

类似于中文的流水账-别伤心，可能都要从这个阶段过吧。汉语的日记刚开始不也像流水帐吗？
Hang in there!