帮改一下这句英语，改得更好

来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/05/15 17:59:22
In my eyes, the experience of studying in this first world rank college and the leading research department has the most importance in my life. Enter in a span-new surrounding feeling the academic atmosphere and ethos of XX College is precious and unique.
要说的就是这意思，楼下几位帮忙用纯正的英语写出来吧

一楼还是有误，楼主应该是打算去这学校，打算先恭维一番说明为什么想去。
In my eyes, the experience of studying in the world top ranking college and the leading research department is the most important thing in my life. To enter into a college with strong academic atmosphere and harmonious ethos must be precious and unique.

In my eyes, the experience of studying in this (first world rank这种说法有问题,用world top ranking比较好) college and the leading research department has (the most importance变成played a very important role) in my life. Enter(+ing动词不能当主语) in a span-new surrounding (+and)feeling the academic atmosphere(environment更恰当) and ethos of XX College is precious and unique.

楼主说的是纯正的中式英语，不过外国人也能明白，但是一看就是中国人说的，你给谁看啊？

就是，不如你把要表达的意思说出来，给你翻译更准确一点