英语是否正确？

来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/05/27 13:35:21
It is your shown attracted me and I love you gradually.After that,I began to understand you. I watch the Game you had play,when I see you shoot directly at the goal on 40M from the door.How I want to hug you!
我想表达，您的表现深深的吸引了我，并且我渐渐的喜欢上了你，从此以后，我开始去了解您。我去看您以前的比赛，当我看到你在距离球门40m以外的地方射门而入的时候，我是多么想去现场拥抱你
最好能帮我改一下，谢谢

i was attracted to your excellent performance and gradually started to like you. since then, i wanted to have a better understand about you, so i began to go to watch the videotape of your matches. when i saw you shooting 40m far from the goal, you had no idea how much i wanted to hug you.

第一句应该不能这样写，and 的前后动词时态要一致，但是你这句这样表达又不能单纯的改时态

I watch the Game you had play
应改成 i watched the game you had played .

后面断句应该改成
When 这句大写, how 小写 ，这两句并成一句
when I saw you shooting

Your performance has deeply attracted me and I have taken to(喜欢上）you gradually .Since then,I began to learn more about you.I watched your previous matches.How I want to embrace you at the scene when I saw you volleying the ball 40m away from the goal.

时态不一致
your shown attracted me deeply and I fell in love with you gradually.After that,I tried to know you, so I watch the Game you had played,and when I saw you shot directly at the goal on 40M away from the door.How